I’m writing a paper and I noticed that I use “which” a lot. (Example: Using neon tubing was soon utilized in his work, which ‘insert what it does here’)
I’m wondering if there’s another way to add in that extra part without having to say ‘which’.
What’s a synonym for separate when used as an adjective?
What’s a synonym for separate when used as a verb?
What is a synonym of accidentally?
Will this do?
I achieved a strong 2:1 in X at Y University and excelled in modules studied during my final year, and received a First in many of them. They included a Financial Analysis and Control module in which I attained a strong First (72%) for a financial performance analysis of Company Z.
You basically have to rephrase to get rid of "whiches". Also, there is nothing wrong with using for which in moderation. I only removed one "which" because the second by itself was just fine.
I like drɱ65 δ's advice for the first sentence. For the second, try:
In my Financial Analysis and Control module I attained a strong First (72%) for a financial performance analysis of the Z Company.
This not only removes the which, but also leaves the sentence with a stronger main verb--attained instead of the wimpier included.